Disguised as rain,
apathy keeps falling from the sky,
striking the leaves
on the tree of good hope,
making them tremble
before hitting the earth
and dampening the ground
with
wasted oppurtunity.
It is so good to have you back at TWW - your words are distinctively beautiful..apathy falling..when you think by nature it doesn't even move..but how it can drown you..quietly..Jae
Disguised as rain,
wasted opportunity don;t we all have those.Great poem
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I like apathy disguised as rain. Creative.
ReplyDeleteWonderful imagery - executed perfectly.
ReplyDeleteIt is so good to have you back at TWW - your words are distinctively beautiful..apathy falling..when you think by nature it doesn't even move..but how it can drown you..quietly..Jae
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone.
ReplyDelete"striking the leaves
ReplyDeleteon the tree of good hope,
making them tremble"
I love the imagery, Jerry! So nice to see you outside of PA smiles to you!
Thanks, Hannah. I get out of the neighborhood every once in a while.
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