Wednesday, July 6, 2011

Redefined Oasis

Heat
radiates from progress.
Blacktop and concrete,
redefined oasis,
melting my resolve.
Feet ache as they melt
and meld,
ceasing to be a part of me
but becoming a part of it.
Wishing for rain
but knowing it brings
only brief salvation
as the dial changes
from bake
to poach
and nasty.

* In response to Three Word Wednesday

8 comments:

  1. Jerry- From the first line to the last, an excellent read. I love this piece.

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  2. Sheilagh lee said:lovely flow to this piece and descriptive phrases.I love this

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  3. It's lovely to read one of your pieces again Jerry..they are so complete..this reminds me of the sizzle on pavements when the rain comes all to briefly after a heat wave..it leaves a funny smell and doesn't really cool you off..a bit like being in a poaching tin! Jae

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  4. Thanks Laurie, Sheilagh and Jae. I've been out of sorts (poetically speaking) for a bit. I hope I'm back on track.

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  5. Oh! I was not expecting that ending! I enjoyed, and felt, the imagery. I could almost smell the tar from the hot pavement. Very nice. Thank you.

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  6. I liked the hard clipped words and feelings expressed in this piece, reflecting the irritation that the heat brings out.

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  7. This is fantastic, I really love your style

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  8. the summer weather seems to bring out the worst, and yet the best, in many of us!

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/07/09/altered-reverie/

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