Monday, March 28, 2011

This Unbroken Line

Never
saw it in the mirror.
harsh lights
and just waking eyes
focused on the business
of being presentable
mean the edges are blurred.
But the snapshot,
under cold, blue skies,
bundled from the cold,
I focus
on my face
and I see, plainly,
bits of her
are still with me
and I smile
knowing
life doesn't end
sharply
but continues on
this unbroken line.

*In response to Carry on Tuesday
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11 comments:

  1. UnknownMarch 28, 2011 at 3:06 PM

    Brilliant lines:

    life doesn't end
    sharply
    but continues on
    this unbroken line.

    Here's mine:
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/03/28/me-brilliantly/

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  2. Jerry WalravenMarch 29, 2011 at 4:00 AM

    Thanks. The end was the hardest part.

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  3. The PoetMarch 29, 2011 at 4:41 AM

    Very nicely done.

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  4. MERYL JAFFE, PhD - parent, psychologist, teacher, author...March 29, 2011 at 5:43 AM

    Oh how lovely. The end was great - glad you worked it out.
    Meryl
    http://departingthetext.blogspot.com

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  5. LisaMarch 29, 2011 at 5:57 AM

    Very inspired piece. I enjoyed it very much.

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  6. Jerry WalravenMarch 29, 2011 at 6:37 AM

    Andy, Meryl and Lisa, Thank you all very much for the comments. I'm Really happy to have discovered carry on tuesday.

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  7. AnonymousMarch 29, 2011 at 10:51 AM

    superb lines..
    well done.

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  8. WhitesnakeMarch 29, 2011 at 2:17 PM

    Deep, dark and provoking!

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  9. Jerry WalravenMarch 29, 2011 at 6:32 PM

    Thanks for the kind comments, Jingle and Whitesnake.

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  10. GloriaMarch 30, 2011 at 6:07 PM

    I think this is excellent! Bits of her are still with you....what a wonderful legacy..lovely! If you get a chance, could you check out mine:
    http://got-2-write.blogspot.com/2011/03/reflection.html

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  11. Jerry WalravenMarch 30, 2011 at 6:16 PM

    Thanks Gloria.

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